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Chapter 1 Page 5

by Peter Gruenbaum and Amanda Kingsley on July 14, 2010 at 12:00 am
Posted In: Chapter 1: The Envelope

Graphic Novel Dialog (Part 2)

By Peter

I used to be totally into audio drama. In our visually-based society, it’s almost a dead art form, but I loved the way it brought to life images in the theater of the imagination. Although I was a big fan of the medium, the reality was that hardly anyone was actually all that good at writing audio drama dialog. The challenge was to have your characters verbally communicate visual information yet somehow have it sound completely natural. Not very many writers could pull it off.

I remember listening to a recording of The Shadow from the 1930s. Just in case you don’t know the plot, the Shadow was a crime-fighting individual who could make himself invisible through hypnosis. The dialog was actually pretty decent, right up until the Shadow went invisible. Then came an endless stream of people talking in a way that they never would in real life. (“That plate of food… it’s lifting itself off the table… all by itself!”)

Sometimes audio drama writers would just abandon trying to write dialog to get across visual information and would rely on narration. The drama became more like an audiobook with sound effects. I always found this approach extremely disappointing.

What’s the connection to graphic novels, which are a completely visual medium? Surprisingly, I see a lot of the same problems with dialog in graphic novels. Although they are visual, graphic novels do not have a smooth flow of time. Because you are looking at a series of snapshots, sometimes writers resort to explaining the obvious in their dialog as a way to get information to the reader. Even the reliance on narration that you hear in badly-written audio drama applies to graphic novels. I can’t tell you how many times I’ve seen a beautifully drawn graphic novel where frame after frame has those little rectangular boxes filled with narrative text and hardly a word of dialog spoken.

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Chapter 1 Page 4

by Peter Gruenbaum and Amanda Kingsley on July 7, 2010 at 12:00 am
Posted In: Chapter 1: The Envelope

Recommended Graphic Novels: Drive

By Peter

One of my favorite webcomic artists is Dave Kellet, who many years ago started the comic Sheldon about a 10 year old, his grandfather, and their talking duck. The strips are often about nothing at all, just Dave expounding on the absurdity of life through his delightful characters.

So it was a surprise to me when he decided to start a new strip called Drive, which is a science fiction graphic novel. It still has the same absurd humor (for example, characters celebrating making it through an asteroid field by getting shakes at Denny’s), but there’s a cool plot involving a spaceship drive, a corrupt emperor, and an alien with amnesia who can sense gravity waves.

Dave publishes a page once a week, just like we do. I asked him at the Emerald City ComicCon how long it would take him to create enough pages for a book at that rate, and he said a couple of years(!). Hopefully it won’t take us that long.

One more factoid about Drive. After the first few pages were published, I wrote to Dave, telling him I was a fan of Sheldon and that I was really enjoying Drive. I pointed out to him that all the characters in Sheldon were male, and that now that he was starting a new strip, there was an opportunity for female characters. Two weeks later, a grandmother-like captain was introduced. Coincidence? Probably.

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Chapter 1 Page 3

by Peter Gruenbaum and Amanda Kingsley on June 30, 2010 at 12:00 am
Posted In: Chapter 1: The Envelope

Graphic Novel Dialog

By Peter

Lately I’ve been thinking a lot about graphic novel dialog. I write the script for Coiled, and then Amanda follows it, but not to the letter. If you look at the first page of chapter 1, you’ll see Joshua walking down the stairs, thinking “Stupid breaker…” My script actually said, “It’s that stupid breaker again.” Amanda shortened it, and I was rather stunned to realize where I had written five words, only two words were completely sufficient to communicate everything.

The more words you have in a graphic novel, the less space you have for art. Too many words break up the flow and strain the eyes. To do it right, I need to find the smallest number of words to bring out what my characters need to say and think. The trick will be to make the those short phrases and sentences sound natural.

More on this later…

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Chapter 1 Page 2

by Peter Gruenbaum and Amanda Kingsley on June 23, 2010 at 12:00 am
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Recommended Graphic Novels: Amulet

By Peter

Another graphic novel series I highly recommend is the Amulet series by Kazu Kibuishi. He has published two books in the series: The Stonekeeper and The Stonekeeper’s Curse. It follows the classic storyline of children working to rescue a parent. (Yes, Coiled is one of those stories as well.) Here’s the description from Amazon:

After the tragic death of their father, Emily and Navin move with their mother to the home of her deceased great-grandfather, but the strange house proves to be dangerous. Before long, a sinister creature lures the kids’ mom through a door in the basement. Em and Navin, desperate not to lose her, follow her into an underground world inhabited by demons, robots, and talking animals.

Both the story and the artwork are extraordinary. We can’t wait for the next book in the series to come out.

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Chapter 1 Page 1

by Peter Gruenbaum and Amanda Kingsley on June 16, 2010 at 12:00 am
Posted In: Chapter 1: The Envelope

Chapter 1

By Peter

We finished the prologue and we’re on to chapter one. The pace slows as we follow Joshua and his quest to find his mother. The style changes, too, to black-and-white line drawings. I’m very excited to have gotten to this point. Amanda is too, and also glad to be drawing people instead of figuring out how to make a flying jaguar look natural.

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